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Comment by ehsankia

3 years ago

Wouldn't the alternative rather be to use commas there, not a hyphen?

"Sometimes writing for money, rather than for art or pleasure, is really quite enjoyable."

In your head, do you read those differently?

Personally, I think this sentence would benefit from a comma before the ‘or’. And in that case we could probably benefit from a clearer way of setting aside the parenthetical.

“Sometimes writing for money, rather than for art, or pleasure, is really quite enjoyable.”

– this seems awkward to me. This version, though:

“Sometimes writing for money—rather than for art, or pleasure—is really quite enjoyable.”

Isn’t that more fluid?

  • > “Sometimes writing for money, rather than for art, or pleasure, is really quite enjoyable.”

    I think that changes the meaning, since it’s now a list of 3 items with an Oxford comma, rather than two lists, with the first list having 1 item, and the second list having 2 items. And I’m having a rough time even making sense of such revised meaning.

    Expressed as pseudo-code, I read the original intent of that sentence as:

    “money and not(art or pleasure) == enjoyable”

    and that can be broken into

    “((money and not art) or (money and not pleasure)) == enjoyable