Comment by Humorist2290

Disappointingly, that is an exceedingly good story for a high school assignment. The use of an appositive phrase alone would raise alarm bells though.

It's nitpicking for flaws, but why not -- what lens on an old DSLR, older than a car, will let you take a macro shot, a wide shot, and a zoom shot of a bird?

In any case I'm not surprised. It's a short story, and it is indeed _serviceable_, but literature is more than just service to an assignment.